The last line pulls everything together so well. I love your writing. It's always so creative and unique.
"But you are the most broken boy I know, hed said, and it took everything I had not to cry. Mostly because hed been the one to break me." I absolutely love that line. <3
" skin is like glass, easy to break and hard to mend. hearts aren't, because you can't fix them. "
Is that really true, though? A heart can never be repaired so it's shiny and new and ready to start over, but it could be fixed enough to work properly, just with a few glitches.
You're so good at writing- putting things in a certain mood, which is something I struggle with. Great, as usual. I like that it ends at nineteen for some reason... maybe that it's not just twenty, seeming almost incomplete. I like that, but I'm not sure why. I'm guessing you didn't mean to do it that way, but it's good.
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I don't suffer from insanity, but enjoy every minute of it.
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lovely. as always
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I love your writing. It's always so creative and unique.
"But you are the most broken boy I know, hed said, and it took everything I had not to cry. Mostly because hed been the one to break me."
I absolutely love that line.
<3
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Every line was visual.
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hearts aren't, because you can't fix them. "
Is that really true, though? A heart can never be repaired so it's shiny and new and ready to start over, but it could be fixed enough to work properly, just with a few glitches.
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Great, as usual.
I like that it ends at nineteen for some reason... maybe that it's not just twenty, seeming almost incomplete. I like that, but I'm not sure why.
I'm guessing you didn't mean to do it that way, but it's good.
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just another person living in the background of everyone's life.
(broken things are usually beautiful.)
Just like you.
Ahaha, not to sound creepy. Yet it's the truth.
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